She turned from the window, her gown rustling as she turned. She had agreed to marry on her father's advice but now that the vows were said, the feelings of regret overwhelmed her.
The portion in bold is my part towards this weekend's Trifextra challenge. You can read all about it by choosing to click on the link above.
In reference to my last Trifectra entry, I apologize to the editors of Trifecta if they were offended. I didn't intend to accuse anyone of anything. I thought it would be a funny way of addressing how close the entries were. I, myself, read every other entry prior to writing mine so that I don't reuse someone else's ideas, especially when only 4 words are involved.
When I first wrote my entry, I wrote it exactly as the winning post but I changed it because after serious thought, I decided that I didn't consider sex as being an "it" so I changed my wording to omit the word.
Thank you to those who used the comments to critique the entry rather than bash me for it. I really did intend for it to be a creative way to voice my feelings.
8 comments:
Oh boy!!! She has a looooong road ahead of her! Sad, really sad but well written since you inspired emotion.
I'm with Gina. It's too sad. You've conveyed this very well.
I am sad for her but yo portrayed this beautifully
Your last section conveys the feeling of the first section very well.
I was hoping to find a conclusion like this. The opening statement was begging for it. Thank you.
I feel so bad for her. well done.
Oh, this poor girl! You broke my heart.
Wow, being in this position must be so terrible and oppressive :( Yout writing is fantastic! :D
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